2011年6月11日 星期六

Expressing an opinion-1

   
    In my opinion, I’m against the conduct of using animals in laboratory experiments. The behavior above is such a cruel way to treat the innocent animals. They don’t do anything wrong, but we human put them into death by using their bodies to test the curative effects. No one is able to undergo the bitterness, so are the animals. There’s no denying that every creatures on earth are equal, but how can we regard the other creatures as being inferior to us? I can’t get it, the people who care about them, too. Using animals in laboratory is not ethical. They may suffer from the rays, being turned into a weird firm-that is not reasonable. They even can’t give birth or have their bodies’ right. After they are being used, the researchers would view them as garbage or a not important stuff. Nevertheless, it will bring horrible effects if the animals died in a way that is against the nature. The food chain will change and do great damage to our human beings. To tell the truth, we human are not so much smart as proud. As one day all the animals get mad and strike back to us, we would deserve the punishment one day.   

7 則留言:

  1. 5th in the earth // on earth
    第二段2nd being turned into a weird firm-that is~ // weird firm?
    小動物看到應該會很開心XDD

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  2. have their bodies’ right.
    可改成become very sick.

    we would no longer live in the world any more.
    可改成受到應有的代價~
    因為這樣寫有點主觀=)

    這篇寫的滿廣的~
    很不錯喔!!!

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  3. 還算順暢~
    只是為什麼每篇文章都要把它分段阿@@ (好奇...

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  4. 最後一句As one day all the animals get mad and strike back to us, we would deserve the punishment one day.

    one day重複用了 也可以寫成 Once all the animals get mad... we would deserve the punishment one day.

    其他的還不錯

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  5. In my opinion, I’m against the conduct of using animals in laboratory experiments.
    你的開頭很讚
    我喜歡:>

    列點明確
    很有條理:>

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  6. 我也反對= =!! you can write it
    裡面竟然有一篇是寫同意拿小動物當白老鼠ˋˊ
    寫的超顧人怨=..=

    No one is able to undergo the bitterness, (and) so are the animals.

    五:every creatures 不用s唷~ 阿後面就是is 唷~~
    how can we regard the(不用the吧) other creatures as being inferior to us? 這句寫得真是太棒了!!ˋˇˊ

    這一句: I can’t get it, the people who care about them, too. 在寫什麼@@?

    They may suffer from the rays, being turned into a weird firm????? 他們接受輻射,變成鬼怪電影??

    結論句怎麼會有兩個one day 押?

    寫太好了!!!!! 只是有些地方我看不太懂你的意思@ˇ@?

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  7. human-->humans

    it will bring horrible effects if the animals died in a way
    --> it will bring horrible effects if the animals die in a way

    As one day -->if one day
    恩~還不錯

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