Recently, the weather is getting hotter and hotter. Who is the “convict”? It might be carbon dioxide, which leads to the global warming. What are the effects that it brings to the earth? Let's start to discuss it right now. First, global warming can bring about drought. Why can we so convince? That is because it causes the high temperature. That is to say, the plants and crops mustn’t live without water and definitely, they may die. Another effect is that various creatures would die, such as animals living in the Africa. As far as I am concerned, I think that the melting ice in the North Pole and the South Pole is really a terrible effect on all the human beings on the earth. As the sea level gradually rises, our belongings may one day float on the sea. Last but not the least, I view the global warming as a significant issue that all of us shouldn’t take the plunge to ignore it. What merely we can do right now is bolster our living behaviors which would do damage to the entire surrounding-unless we discover the antidote to the global warming.
第一點 全球暖化造成乾旱? 不全然吧!
回覆刪除in the North Pole and South Pole // south pole前面是不是要再加一個the
7th effect for all the human beings ~ // effect on all the ~~
effect只要當”影響”的意思 不論詞性其後接on
all of us should take the plunge to ignore it.為甚麼要忽視?
這篇使用了挺多的adv單字欸! 真棒喔XDD ((take the plunge antidote
這篇我覺得挺好的阿! 不過 這篇你以二氧化碳,全球暖化為內容 所以你就必須要真正了解你的資訊是否正確 因為這種問題真的很有探討性 但是 如果你的論點本身就錯誤了 這樣你要拿什麼辯論阿X) 這樣就像 家如你的題目訂”我喜歡吃肯德基的原因” 你的論點卻說”因為他們的豬肉滿福堡很好吃” 這樣就很怪阿 因為豬肉滿福堡是麥當勞的XDD 所以多注意喽!!
who is the “convict”? 很震撼我心xD!!
回覆刪除然後It might be CO2 又笑一下 呵呵~
開頭很棒~
take the plunge to ignore it 哈哈:">
解決它不是忽視它唷xD!
我覺得你最近的文章很不錯欸=ˇ=
都偷偷自習唷xDD
What are the effects that it brings to; let’s start to discuss it right now.
回覆刪除-->我覺得這樣看起來比較好看What are the effects that it brings to the earth? Let's start to discuss it right now.
As the sea level gradually rising,
-->As the sea level gradually rises
ignore是忽視唷~為什麼大家要忽視他??
椿茱的舉例好好笑唷~~超有創意
倒數第四行 I view the global warming as a significant issue that all of us should take the plunge to ignore it.
回覆刪除中文:我認為全球暖化是個重大的議題 所以我們應該決定忽視它XDDDD
抓到錯誤了~~(不知道在得意什麼...)
好啦~ 錯字改一下
其他的不錯阿 每個論點都講得很清楚XD
CO2要查查看正式的書面用法喔~
回覆刪除sea level是海平面吧~
看起來有點奇怪~可以查查看其他的用法~
恩恩~
文章十分完整~錯誤也很少~
補充和連結詞也用得很好~
很棒喔=)
我喜歡你開頭的問法唷o__<擬人法會吸引讀者
回覆刪除然後First, global warming can generate drought這句其實不一定喔
take the plunge to ignore it.這句笑倒我了xdddd
ignore用錯單字了喔~冒險嘗試去忽略它?:))
椿茱真的是太好笑了 真可愛xDDD
回覆刪除覺得看別人的comments學到的事情反而比作文還多XDD
Recently, the weather is getting hotter and hotter and who is the “convict”?
這裡一直到第二個hotter都還ok很正常但是你接後面那句
我覺得超級奇怪唷=A=
如果要問誰是兇手至少換下一句感覺比較不會那麼突然-.-
global warming can generate drought
generate是只產生某種事物或能量吧
我發現你用的單字好像只懂他字面上的意思
卻不知道它到底怎嚜用喔~要注意黑:)
如果不知道哪個單字用在哪方面可以看字典上的例句
horrible effect >> treeible effect
horrible跟同上的意思一樣
而且horrible是恐怖的意思唷! ex horrible movies
WhyThat is because it causes the high temperature. That is to say, the plants and crops mustn’t live without water and definitely, they may die.
回覆刪除>>>must 的用法要查一下文法書
列點很明確喔:>