2011年3月2日 星期三

My favorite movie” Confession”

This winter vacation, I watched a fantastic movie called “Confession”. It said that a teacher’s daughter was murdered by two of her students. In the story, the teacher told them that she would do everything to avenge her daughter’s comrades. One of the killers eventually took his own life because he couldn’t bear the pressure that he murdered a little kid with his own hands. And the other one was extremely lost his nerve as a result of his mother’s death. The two above consequences were just their punishments, and they deserved it.  
After I finished this film, I was under the impression that it was completely an amazing story that my feeling was thrilled with grief. To me, this was not just a simple movie; it was a topic for discussion that talked over the relationship between the teacher and the student, and the teenager’s education problems. I consider that all of us in this world should face up to teenager’s character development. All we can do now is to advance the society’s quality instead of thinking of some illegal minds which would hurt other people.     

8 則留言:

  1. 沒退兩格唷!

    The two above consequences
    The two consequences above 好像比較順

    the relationship between the teacher and the student
    student應該為複數(students)

    the teenager’s education problems
    teenager’s 應該為teenagers'
    educational 用名詞不知道行不行


    consider 要用過去式嗎
    teenagers'
    identity development
    development of personality
    personality development
    不知道有沒有character development 這種說法

    All we can do now is to advance the society’s quality instead of thinking of some illegal minds which would hurt other people.
    最後一句我不太懂欸@@

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  2. 第三行avenge her daughter’s comrades是報復她的同學吧!?我不確定這樣可不可以 改成she avenged herself on her daughter's comrades或是she avenged her daughter's death on/upon the comrades

    向...報仇/進行報復
    = avenge oneself on/upon
    = be avenged on/upon

    為某人向...報仇
    = avenge sb. on/upon

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  3. After I finished this film少了watching
    which would hurt other people.would-->will

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  4. One of the killers eventually took his own life because he couldn’t bear the pressure that he(had 應該是過去完成式)murdered a little kid with his own hands.

    不確定~ >_<

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  5. And the other one was extremely lost his nerve as a result of his mother’s death.

    這句有was和lost兩個動詞唷~

    After I finished this film, I was under the impression that it was completely an amazing story that my feeling was thrilled with grief.

    這裡的兩個that不是關代也不是連接詞
    可能要整句修改一下

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  6. After I finished this film, I was under the impression that it was completely an amazing story that my feeling was thrilled with grief.可以加改成After finishing watching this film, I was under the impression that it was completely an amazing story. And my feeling was thrilled with grief.

    To me, this was not just a simple movie; it was a topic for discussion that talked over the relationship between the teacher and the student, and the teenager’s education problems.可以改成 To me, this was not just a simple movie;on the contrary, it was a topic for discussion which talked about the relationship between the teacher and the student,inculding the teenager’s education problems.

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  7. 第一行 第二句
    你可以先打說 In this movie, it is said that...
    不然妳直接這樣打 好像是在陳述事實

    節尾的地方打的不錯
    有宣導的感覺xd

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  8. it was a topic for discussion that talked over the relationship between the teacher and the student, and the teenager’s education problems.
    是不是改成between the teacher , the students,and the teenager's........
    因為一直有and的話會不太順!

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