Let’s compare Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman’s driver’s license. First, both of them have the same eye color. Second, Stephanie Brooks has black hair. Similarly, Ann Friedman’s has black hair. Third, their dates of birth are similar to each other. Last, Stephanie Brooks’ height is the same as Ann Friedman. We can tell form the details that Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman are much alike.
開頭太唐突了!
回覆刪除應該加上點故事成分~
結尾也是!
比較的方面有多方嘗試~
十分不錯喔!
不過這次的篇幅有點短!
Let’s compare Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman’s driver’s license.
回覆刪除應該要用compare .. with
Let's comare Stephanie Brooks with Ann Friedman's driver's license.
Second, Stephanie Brooks has black hair. Similarly, Ann Friedman’s has black hair.
Ann Friedman’s >>>> 不用所有格
We can tell form the details that Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman are much alike.
可以改成
We can tell form these details and know that Stephanie Brooks and Friedman are much alike in conclusion.
Let’s compare Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman’s driver’s license.
回覆刪除-->Let’s compare Stephanie Brooks' driver’s license to Ann Friedman’s.
有點短呢~
都被講完了O__Q我傷心了OAQQQQQQQQ
回覆刪除總之~有點短:">
總覺得不會去compare駕照＠＠ 你可以像利利那樣想一種開頭我覺得比較好~
回覆刪除Second, Stephanie Brooks has black hair. Similarly, Ann Friedman’s(沒有's吧) has black
hair.
We can tell form the details that Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman are much alike. 這句怪怪欸
→We can know that Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman are much alike 『from their deivers' licenses 或 from those details』.
嗯可以在寫的鄭順更豐富。ˇ。
感覺前面有點唐突!!
回覆刪除可以多加點想像啦!!
感覺都被講完了~
We can tell form the details that Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman are much alike.
→我也感覺怪怪的!!
上面的建議都很好喔~
Let’s compare Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman’s driver’s license
回覆刪除>> Compare to Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman’s driver’s license, they are ~之類的
eye color>> eyes color
如上面那些回覆
可以再補充詳細一點
第一行driver’s license
回覆刪除//driver's licenses
We can tell form the details that Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman are much alike.
// We can tell from the details that Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman are much alike.
很快的切入,很快的結束...
有點趕時間的感覺呢!
而且篇幅有稍短些,讓他長點吧:D
文章還滿短的 可以再加長
回覆刪除第二行 Similarly, Ann Friedman’s has black hair.
跟第三行 their dates of birth are similar to each other 這兩個句型還滿像的 把其中一句換成另一個句型會比較好