How to plan a trip
Planning a trip can be easy. First of all, you need to decide where to go, where to eat, which hotel you have to stay. And then, check your schedule. Make sure that you have enough time to travel around the whole world. Second, choose some countries that you really want to visit. Third, google the weather, and the flight time. I think that you won’t want to bump into a sticky weather actually. Finally, ask for some experienced people who have already travel for a long time, their opinions must ne useful. Last but not the least, have a good mood during your travel. And I hope the above tips can work.
I think that you won’t want to bump into a sticky weather actually.actually接起來怪怪的呢
回覆刪除And I hope the above tips can work.改成 And I hope the tips above can work.應該比較順~~
actually 好像不要比較好@@吧,看你
回覆刪除倒數三是traveled 唷
是be 唷~~
文章整體我覺得很棒很有條理~
It will work的! X >
第一句
回覆刪除既然你都用wh開頭
那what to eat會更好~
別忘了在最後一件事後要加and
have to像是有義務的感覺
可以改成 you'd like to
倒屬第三行的travel要加ed
通篇文章簡潔清楚
只是內容再多一點的話會更好唷:>
第一行 you need to decide where to go, where to eat, which hotel you have to stay.
回覆刪除which前面加and比較好
句型: ..., ..., and...
再來是倒數第三行後面 their opinions must ne useful
打錯字了 是be喔:)
Describing a Process-(4)-題目前要加喔~
回覆刪除Make sure that you have enough time to travel around the whole world.
-the whold place 會不會比較合理勒~
要記得訂機票和打包行李喔~~~
where to eat → what to eat
回覆刪除bump into a sticky weather actually
actually用assuredly比較好吧
have already travel
記得p.p喔traveld
must ne useful
打錯喽 是be
整體感覺很清楚
但是可能較傾向於直接列點
沒有進一步說明
使得文章節奏顯得十分快速
建議可以多加一些延伸摟
First of all, you need to decide where to go, where to eat, which hotel you have to stay.
回覆刪除which hotel you have to stay.前要and加唷
Make sure that you have enough time to travel around the whole world.
不是選一個地方旅遊嗎?為什麼要有足夠的時間遊全世界?
Second, choose some countries that you really want to visit.
第一點不是就決定好要去哪了嗎?
雖然沒有很多錯但是我覺得你可以寫得更多更深入一些耶!!
you need to decide where to go, where to eat, which hotel you have to stay.
回覆刪除→you need to decide where to go, what to eat,and which hotel you have to stay.
好像比較好!!
因為你第一點就叫大家決定了!
感覺二、三點就多餘了!!
舉點例子也不錯喔!!